Thesis: This marvelous park bonds the city to a non-wilderness park, but a park that fits perfectly into the puzzle of a modern downtown.
Body Paragraph: The city of extraordinary movement, Houston’s downtown is a busy city with incredible high and disturbing noises. Like all other big downtowns, skyscrapers all around the city create a wall of noise that’s built by cars, people, construction, and alarms. The strong walls make the sound of every moving thing in the street travel through the opening like and underground metro coming from hundred meters away. This noise that builds up and travels with the wind its brought out into the border line of the tall blocks, flooding the park with musical orchestra completed by the natural sounds of birds next to you and the final touch of leafs scratching the concrete floors. Now when I am sitting in the deck I hear the wind carry the sound of a screaming tire, surf on the shallow lake and burst into small waves. This marvelous park bonds the city to a non-wilderness park, but a park that fits perfectly into the puzzle of a modern downtown.
Great thesis! It is exciting and interesting. Good descriptive language and figurative language used. Definitely would like to read more because you bring life to the place through your writing style.
ReplyDeleteBefore this class, I had never heard of Discovery Green Park. After reading your paragraph and thesis, I definitely want to take my first visit. I love your use of descriptive language and I'm sure it will make others want to visit the park as well!
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